Introduction
The paper is well written, and the topic is adequately addressed. The introduction of the paper gives the reader a grasp of what is being investigated in the study and what to expect. However, the main weakness is that it fails to give a cohesive thesis as a guide to the reader of the paper. Although the conclusion of the paper is well written and articulated, it fails to go in coherence with the thesis in the introduction part of the paper. The conclusion, however, does provide a very clear explanation of the findings and shows the reader the significance of the findings of the study.
Strengths and weaknesses of the paper
The main strength of the paper is that it used a quantitative approach in collecting data. The qualitative data provided is a strong point for the paper, because it does allow the reader to see the significance of the data, unlike in cases where the paper is based on qualitative data. The paper also uses semi-longitudinal data, which provides a way to observe the research subjects for some time, long enough to see the effects of the material being tested. The main weakness of the paper is that it lacks a smooth flow from the introduction to the method, findings and the conclusion of the paper. As a result, the reader is likely to lose focus as he or she reads the paper because somewhere in the paper, it is no longer clear what the paper is discussing. In the discussion section, the paper fails to focus on the fact that it is dealing with the effect of dual-focus soft contact lens wear on axial myopia progression in children, and looks at the broader issue of myopia.
Correcting these mistakes
One way to avoid this mistake is by making sure that the thesis of the paper is written, and that throughout the paper, the discussion is done in line and within the boundaries of the thesis. The thesis should be in line with the topic of study, to make sure that the paper is focused in the right direction and does not lose focus.
What the paper added to my knowledge
The main thing that I learned from the paper is that soft contact lenses can be used to correct myopia in children, without affecting the way their eyes develop (Anstice & Phillips, 2011). This is very important because, with children, it is good to know that their organs are still growing, and using focus lenses can affect the way their eyes will grow, which may make the eyes develop in a way that would badly affect the young children using the lenses. The revelation of the fact that using soft contact lenses does not affect the way their eyes develop was not only new information but also very useful because it can be used for future studies (Anstice & Phillips, 2011).
Overall opinion and evaluation
The paper is addressing a very important issue, and although the paper has some weaknesses, it does give the reader a better chance of understanding the issue. The paper is well articulated in that it is written in a manner that even a layperson on the subject can understand the issue being discussed in the paper.
Reference
Anstice, N.S., & Phillips, J. R. (2011). Effect of dual-focus soft contact lens wear on axial myopia progression in children. Ophthalmology, 118 (6), 1152-1161.